Posudek oponenta diplomové práce
Studijní program:Mezinárodní ekonomické vztahy Studijní obor:Mezinárodní politika a diplomacie Akademický rok:2020/2021
Název práce:Spolupráce v řízení vesmírného provozu: USA v. EU Řešitel:Bc. Patrik Martínek
Vedoucí práce:Mgr. Miloslav Machoň, Ph.D.
Oponent:Ing. Michal Strnad
Hlediska Stupeň
hodnocení
1. Stupeň splnění cíle práce 2
2. Logická stavba práce 2
3. Práce s literaturou, citace 2
4. Adekvátnost použitých metod 2
5. Hloubka analýzy ve vztahu k tématu 2
6. Vlastní přístup k řešení 1
7. Formální úprava práce 1
8. Jazyková a stylistická úprava práce 1
Konkrétní připomínky a dotazy k práci:
The author of the thesis aims to „identify the differences in various approaches to space traffic
management (STM) and identify potential common grounds for a hypothetical establishment of a globally accepted framework“ while, at the same time, the goal being to „examine the underlining differences between the emerging approaches to space traffic management in the EU and the United States. The supplementary question that this thesis will examine is whether regional STM regimes are an obstacle to a comprehensive global STM regime.“
The overall impression of the thesis is rather positive. I appreciate the author’s apparent interest in the subject. However, I need to address two major issues.
Firstly, the thesis suffers from a mismatch between the declared goal, the concepts used in the theoretical part, and the empirical section. The theoretical part – although developing relevant concepts within his the author’s field of study – does not provide suitable grounding for the subsequent comparative study.
Furthermore, the author pays too much attention to unnecessary details on private sector initiatives. These are not relevant to the analysis of similarities and differences of the US and EU approaches to space traffic management. Instead, the author could consider developing alternative, more appropriate concepts given his research aim, perhaps securitisation of hybrid threats in space (?). Being a comparative study, I miss a more detailed explanation on the comparative criteria and logic of their selection.
Secondly, although the author applies the reference style consistently, direct quotations (and sometimes also paraphrases) lack the exact page of the cited source. This is acceptable only when: (a) the primary finding of a work is cited, or (b) a crucial concept/term of a given work is cited. Additionally, in some cases, the cited source does not come directly after the direct quotation, but appears at the end of the paragraph.
I appreciate the author’s very good level of academic English. Minor imperfections such as contracted forms appear sporadically.
Futher questions: 1. Where does the author see current factors hindering sucessful cooperation of world (super)powers in the question of space traffic management? 2. Given the latest discussions, are issues of space traffic management/space security etc. at least minimally reflected in the foreign policy of the Czech Republic. If so, how?
Závěr: Diplomovou práci doporučuji k obhajobě.
Navrhovaná výsledná klasifikace práce: 2
Datum: 18. 8. 2021 Ing. Michal Strnad
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